John Marsden Writing Topic #535
If one is stone cold, emotionally, and ten is over the top, try describing the same sequence of events several different times, taking a different number as your guide each time.**
1. Stone Cold
2. Cold
3. Cool
4. Warm/Worried
5. Stressed
6. Shocked
7. Serious Concern
8. Panic
9. Drama Queen
10. Over the Top
1. A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I heard two people died, this made me late to work.
2. A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I heard two people died, oh well.
3. A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I heard two people died, how sad.
4. A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I heard two people died, that’s so sad, my thoughts and prayers are with their families.
5. A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I heard two people died, I can’t believe it! I’m late for work too, I don’t know what to do.
6. I can’t believe what I just saw, a car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole like a bowling ball. I heard two people died, I can’t believe it, two lives ended just like that.
7. I can’t believe what I just saw, a car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole, I hope everyone driving in the lanes are okay. I heard two people died, I hope their families were told straight away and that they are being looked after.
8. Oh my God! Oh my God! A car blasted through two lanes of traffic and ran into a pole! I couldn’t believe it! I called an ambulance, I saw two people in there, they needed help! Oh my God! I heard they died! What if I waited too long to call?
9. Oh my God! Oh my God! I saw a car blast through two lanes of traffic and run into a pole! I was nearly hit, I could have been hurt! I heard two people died, that could have been me! I can’t believe how close I was to dying today!
10. Oh my God! Oh my God! A car blasted through two lanes of traffic like an out-of-control rocket and ran into a pole like a bowling ball! I heard that the two people in the car died instantly, no way that they stood a chance! Such as horrible way to die, no loved ones, nothing.
**Reference: Marsden J 1998, Everything I Know About Writing, Pan Macmillan, Australia.